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L.G  using paragraph to organise my  Ideas

S.O.S

- use time  connectives to order paragraphs E.G firstly , finally

-Introduce argument  at the start of each paragraph .

-use at least 5 persuasive words from the lists

-use the audiences name in each paragraph

Mr Moore , 99% of children wants to go outside on a rainy day , Mr Moore I'm going to tell you 3 thrilling Ideas why you should give us more sports time .

Firstly, Mr  Moore S.P.S should have  more  sports  time  not just  in winter .Girls want more time to play netball more often . boys are destbite to play rugby but no one will do nothing about it .

Secondly , Mr Moore S.P.S should have more sports time because we all need to keep fit and people  absolutely need to keep fit  because  of their health  and to get faster and stronger .

Thirdly, Mr Moore  you should let  us have more sports time because some people like to try some completely new sport . people need to keep fit  and strong for their health . everyone likes to try new sports so I recommend  that you should give us more sports time .

I have just gave you 3 thrilling reasons why  you should give us more sports time .   

                        WAR

L.G create a mood of fear/ horror

S.O.S language  that creates fear

-adjectives/ nouns

-see/hear

Dear mum and dad

As I get out of the boats I fall into the painful freezing, cold water, me and heavy  bag pack finally get to shore  I throw my heavy bag in the trench ,I look over and my mate Paul is lieing on the  ground with blood everywhere I screamed HELP! I stand there  horrified .

I hear the germans sneaking up behind me I run through  all the smelly bloody dead bodies I hear soldiers screaming there death . Suddenly a bullet just misses my leg. I see more and more people  dieing from Switzerland.

Love Lukah